I don't know where to start, everything in your mission was bad, and by everything I mean EVERYTHING. Your dialogs were so bad that I wanted to cry, you should really improve them and put in some colors ( tutorial: http://dyom.gtagames.nl/showtut/50 ), second bad thing you put a checkpoint in the interior / building so that put the checkpoint to a diffrent location on the map and the third bad thing was the long drive way ! Some people may like the long way to drive but alot probably hate it unle

unless if it is a racing mission. If I have to rate it from 0 to 5 I wouldn't even give it a 0. Don't give up cause your first mission sucked, you are new and you still have alot to learn, if you are going to look some tutorials and try to improve your missions, people will like you ;)

hey, where did you get that mod -> Inv - weapon - freeze - airbrk ...etc ? Can you give me the link?

Added to DYOM Graders thread.
http://www.gtaforums.com/index.php?act=ST&f=263&t=561876&st=0#entry1062669246

Well You did autorun the mission & your story was okay but your mission was really boring, Driving all the way to Venturas & fighting a guy by punching him? LOL anyway it was not bad, could be better 2/5